Feedback from Rough Cut

Planning – Feedback from Rough Cut

After creating the rough cut I showed to various peers of multiple ages to see what the feedback would be.

Positives

• Music goes well
• Good title font
• Titles appear in and out in time
• Piano focusing is good
• Theme clearly established
• Production logo is brilliant
• Sound works well
• Good mise-en-scene and props
• Odd jump cuts on the gate but it works well
• Front/side/back of car shot is good

Negatives

Book shot could shorten to just zoom in

• I decided that this feedback was fair as the two book shots could be easily shortened. In the editing suite I removed the initial shot of the book so now it just zooms in. The means the film doesn’t slow down as much and gives fewer details away about the book as the audience sees less of it.

Should the production logo blast away?

• After trying various different endings for the production logo I eventually decided to keep the blast away affect at the end. This is because it brings the titles more alive and also adds a sense of excitement to otherwise more tedious titles.

Remove slow drive in shot

• I completely agreed with this feedback so I removed the shot of the car driving slowly

Text over numbers unclear

• I took this into consideration and moved the text so it only appeared in a shot where it was fully visible

Put the pacing steps shot before the laptop closes

• This was an editing error that had not noticed and after it was pointed out I put the pacing before the laptop closing. This is because it means that when the laptop closes it is the end of that dining room scene so to have pacing in the dining room again made little sense

Cut some of the shots after the A young Film text near the end

• These shots in question were the shots showing the various newspaper headlines linking together to foreshadow an overarching plot. I decided to cut down these shots because on reflection they did last too long

Remove zoom out of opportunity at the end

• I also decided to follow this feedback because the final shot I was not happy with but I hadn’t considered taking it out. It still has the transition from the words opportunity to the title card but without the zoom out, as the zoom doesn’t add anything to the opening.

Overall the feedback was very useful as it highlighted good aspects that I could focus on for my evaluation and also helped me greatly tighten up the editing procedure and make it more slick.